Haiku 170

Posted: under Alison's Haiku, Daily Haiku.
Tags: , June 19th, 2009

by Alison

by Alison

I need time alone –

nothing around me but this

pink and blue sunset



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7 Comments »

  • 1

    I like the “pink and blue” sunset. Rarely is a sunset described with those colors!

    Comment by Kelly — June 19, 2009 @ 5:27 am

  • 2

    Huh, I don’t know if this one works. Reading it again it sounds like I am complaining about the sunset. But really, this sunset embraced me and made me realize how I need a moment to myself now and then to notice the beauty that can only be found by looking skyward. Any suggestions for a reworking of this one?

    Comment by Alison — June 19, 2009 @ 8:30 am

  • 3

    Maybe change the second line to

    “a moment to reflect on”

    or maybe

    “time to drink in the sight of”

    but only ’cause you asked… B-)

    Comment by rgdaniel — June 19, 2009 @ 8:37 am

  • 4

    How ’bout:

    peaceful solitude,
    nothing around me but,
    this pink and blue sunset

    Or (on same topic)

    indigo hour
    sweet, comforting solitude
    my needed respite

    Comment by haikusue — June 19, 2009 @ 8:44 am

  • 5

    wow, that last one was a beauty, haikusue…..love ‘indigo hour’ great description.

    how about last line ” much-needed respite”

    Comment by johanna — June 19, 2009 @ 11:17 am

  • 6

    What about for the first line: My time alone now

    Comment by Ariel — June 19, 2009 @ 12:43 pm

  • 7

    Wow, thanks for the great ideas everyone! Your suggestions capture the spirit of alone time as a precious gift versus my unintended complaint against a sunset. Now I have lots to work with:)

    Comment by Alison — June 19, 2009 @ 7:40 pm

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