Comments on: Haiku 313

By: Kelly

Kelly — Wed, 11 Nov 2009 16:02:39 +0000

And no. I do not make my broth from scratch. Are you kidding? You think I can handle a whole chicken carcass? No way.

By: Kelly

Kelly — Wed, 11 Nov 2009 16:02:00 +0000

I like punctuation. But I’m a grammar girl, so perhaps that’s to be expected.

I do enjoy playing with punctuation and capitalization in my haiku. When we started this year, I wouldn’t have thought the punctuation could make such a difference. But I do play with it before I publish.

By: Alison

Alison — Tue, 10 Nov 2009 18:23:21 +0000

Starting… to… come down with something. This sounds quite nice. I have to ask - did you make the stock or use a can? I’ve been wanting to make a stock out of fresh chicken for some time now but something about throwing a whole chicken in a pot is intimidating to me.

Also, I like the visual element of this haiku. The punctuation is very balanced. Two commas on the first line, one comma right in the middle on the second line and then no commas on the third line. I was reading in one haiku book that some haiku-ers don’t use commas or capitalization, that it distracts. But sometimes ya just need them! And when it is so balanced, as in this one, I think punctuation can add to the poem.

By: Gillena Cox

Gillena Cox — Mon, 09 Nov 2009 22:41:12 +0000

Yummmmmmmm

much love
gillena

By: Bonnie

Bonnie — Mon, 09 Nov 2009 13:42:42 +0000

Kelly,

“Sustaining” and “satisfying” smack in the center of soup… that sounds so scrumptious! I’m sipping soup through the cold season too.

Bonnie