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  Oh, I just love this one. This goes in my top ten for Kelly haiku.

  I love the imagery in the first line, the fingernail clipping. So everyday, such a small thing we throw out. I love the imagery of the highway home. Completely humble, not romantic. And then the moon right in the middle…

  I also love the way this one looks. It’s small. I was convinced just by the look of it that it had less than 15 syllables, but no. This one is 5.7.5. Perfect seventeen syllables.

  Comment by Alison — January 20, 2010 @ 7:51 am

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  Gee. Thanks, Alison. I’d be interested in what you consider the other top 9…

  As for your response that this is a humble haiku, and not a romantic one, perhaps Hubby was right when he said:

  http://www.haikubytwo.com/haiku-339/

  he he he

  Comment by Kelly — January 20, 2010 @ 10:26 am

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  The “balling socks” one is definitely in the top 5, I know that : )

  In regard to humility… it’s overrated! Especially for women, I think. But humility works well in haiku. Ah, that’s why politicians need haiku! I think I’m rambling…

  Well anyway, the second line IS romantic. The moon is romantic. That’s what so interesting about this one. The romantic component is sandwiched between two humble images. A really nice effect.

  Comment by Alison — January 20, 2010 @ 10:40 am

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