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  Good one Alison, thank god the Summer is getting over. The fall is going to be beautiful.

  Comment by Chris — August 25, 2010 @ 5:36 am

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  Alison is stretching her haiku wings! Short, crisp. I like it.

  Comment by Kelly — August 25, 2010 @ 10:22 am

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  Ohhhh, is this your first shorter haiku, Alison? I REALLY like it!

  Comment by Gisele — August 25, 2010 @ 12:58 pm

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  a very nice haiku, alison.

  isn’t it great to write unfettered
  by the traditional count?
  it chases out the often-
  contrived extra syllables.
  i enjoy the barest, bare bones!

  Comment by johanna — August 26, 2010 @ 6:14 am

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  Thanks everyone! Yes, I think this is my first shorter haiku. And Gisele, I used your advice -I initially composed this as a longer haiku and then thought it would be a good one to experiment with paring it down.

  Comment by Alison — August 26, 2010 @ 11:15 am

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