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  Have fun…keep trying…I would love a brown-eyed MN grandchild!! Mom

  Comment by Mom — March 2, 2009 @ 7:38 am

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  Oh, I know this conversation and the complex feelings around it. But still, auspicious words from doc!

  Comment by Alison — March 2, 2009 @ 7:54 am

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  I know you like the 5-7-5 form, but a truer haiku structure would be

  test results—
  the doctor finds no reason
  I’m not pregnant

  And, for a stronger juxtaposition

  spring morning
  the doctor finds no reason
  I’m not pregnant

  In the second of these, you have a kigo (season reference), a defining feature of classical haiku and one that generates a kind of pathos in relation to the situation denoted in lines 2-3.

  You’ve found a great moment in any case

  positive . . .
  waiting for his call
  she hugs her news

  Comment by Bill K — March 6, 2009 @ 7:42 pm

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  Ohhh. That second one is nice. I do like the juxtaposition of the “spring-renewal” idea and the “no pregnancy” theme.

  Comment by Kelly — March 7, 2009 @ 7:58 am

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  Speaking from experience Kel - as hard as I know it is - try not to try too hard, it will happen when you least expect it. Very exciting to hear that you are trying! If you ever need an understanding ear - give me a call!

  Comment by Aunge — March 13, 2009 @ 8:36 am

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